Fat vs. Food
Why are students on college
campuses always headed toward the Health Center? In reality, the foods
available are choices that lack key nutritional value.
When you arrive on campus
you think to yourself: “I’m going to eat healthy, workout and feel good.” About
a week later, reality sets in. Have you ever heard of the “Freshman 15?” Contrary
to parental belief, it’s a real thing. A popular website that welcomes reader
contribution is Urban Dictionary. This website describes the Freshman 15 as: “when a first year college student (usually a female) eats
a ton, and proceeds to sit on her a** and gain 15 lbs.” (Urban Dictionary)
Let me tell you how you can
achieve your goals. Seemingly, “everybody does it.” We all adjust to our new
"body type,” and the pounds pile on. Surviving the Freshman 15 is simple
if you have the right yoga pants and big t-shirt to hide what’s underneath.
5 Steps to the Freshman 15
1.Eat the cheapest foods you can find
2.Nap multiple times a day
3.Avoid the gym
4.Drink alcohol
5.Choose stretchy workout attire over regular clothes
College students constantly complain
about not having enough money to choose healthier options, but things can be sacrificed. Excuses for eating
healthy do not always have to be about cost. There are healthier options; eating
one slice of pizza from the dining hall with a salad instead of eating three
slices makes a huge difference. If you were not making unhealthy choices in the
first place, you wouldn’t have to buy new clothes as a result of the weight
gain. It’s easy for students to give parents reasons why we can’t make a change-what we should be
saying is we won’t.
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When my sister went to college, she was one of
those people who packed on comfort weight. She was far away from home, and
eating with her friends made her feel better. She started to realize that the
pizza and late night indulgences were not helping her adjust to college life at
all, so she decided to make a change. My sister went to the doctor and they
told her she neede more vitamins; but buying vitamins cost fifty dollars for a
thirty-day supply! How does this make sense? She wanted to research all of the
different things she could do to make her feel better. “I needed to make a
change; Advocare was right for me.”(Doyle) The day my sister joined the 24-day
Challenge called advocare, which consists of different vitamin supplements, her
whole perspective on eating changed. Vitamins supplements are expensive if you are
not consuming foods that naturally have the nutrients in them. If she had
chosen to eat healthier things from the start, she wouldn’t need supplements.
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Something has got to change; make your diet different, change what you eat. YOU have to make the choice; nobody else can make it for you. A healthy lifestyle is all about balance and change.
Works
Cited
Doyle,Alicia. Telephone Interview. 24
Nov. 2014.
The author’s persuasive purpose is to convince reader’s that it is possible to stay healthy in college and avoid the freshman 15. The author uses pathos when discussing her personal example of the struggle with the freshman 15 to further connect with the audience and in result persuade them. The author also uses logos when discussing the things we do that lead to the freshman 15. This sarcastic list of what not to do provides the reader with clear logic on how to avoid that awful weight gain. The author definitely accomplished their persuasive purpose because readers can now use what they learned while reading this blog and keep it in mind in their everyday lives in order to live healthier and happier as discussed in the blog. This blog could use more evidence about weight gain in college to increase the appeal to ethos and logos or even more examples of ways to avoid the freshman 15 to further convince their audience that there is a way to stay healthy in college. Overall, this blog was very effective and helpful to the college audience it was intended for.
ReplyDeleteMaggie,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really great job with your blog post. You kept it relatable to people of the college age level and kept the language appropriate for people of that same age group. I think the persuasive purpose of this blog post is to convince people to not start off on a bad foot in college, and eat healthy to avoid excessive weight gain. I think one of the rhetorical strategies most used in this blog post was pathos. It elicits an emotional response from readers. I believe, because the weight gain is so relatable, and it is something a lot of people go through. Another rhetorical strategy used was ethos, because the author is a student in college. It is obvious they know what they are talking about because they know from first hand experience. I do believe the author achieved their persuasive purpose in writing this blog post. One suggestion I have for making your blog more persuasive is to include another source that contains facts that support what you are talking about. Perhaps even a quote from a credible source? Overall, I really liked your blog post. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI believe you did an overall good job on this blog post! Your topic is one that is easily relatable to the majority of your intended audience and I believe that you effectively persuaded them with your use of pathos. Your personal story of your sister’s struggle with the freshman 15 and how she overcame bad eating habits. This could inspire your audience to do what your sister did and take responsibility for their bad eating habits instead of the common excuse of their not being any healthy options. Your language used was appropriate for your audience and when I read your blog it flowed nicely with no unintended interruptions. Your use of visual aids were both humorous and relevant to your topic. My suggestions for improvement for your blog are limited because your blog is so well written. But what I would do would be to possibly either shorten your middle paragraph or split it up in order to keep your audience’s attention. Also, more evidence on how students can eat healthy for cheap could greatly benefit your argument here. Overall I believe that you have a very well written and successful blog. It has inspired me to eat healthy so I can fight off the dreaded freshman 15.