Food nowadays is pumped full of unnatural preservatives and other chemicals which can negatively affect the consumers health. It is ironic that as technology improves and society advances that food becomes worse and worse. Just a few years ago, in 2006, was the largest E. Coli outbreak ever and it resulted from a single grower (Pouliot and Sumner). That is the modern problem with food (which includes meats in addition to plants), that only a few people control it. Imagine that you could get sick at UT while someone else gets sick in New York and both leaves could be from the same plant, mind-blowing.
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America's highly industrialized food system is not even the worst example of what could happen when people stop caring about the quality of food. Look at China, sometimes you will turn on the news (or, let's be real, if your parents are watching the news) you will see the Chinese people with masks on and then videos of chickens. And since you don't pay attention to the news I'll tell you that the story says that all those chicken, and some of the people, have bird flu. Think about the fact that their food is literally sick before it gets sent to be eaten. You don't want to end up wearing masks, do you? They just don't look good, they clash with the outfit.
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In all if you don't want, yet another way to get you sick besides being around tons of people who have no manners and won't hesitate to sneeze in your face, buy food that wasn't prepared with a factory mindset and buy from around your community. Your health and taste buds will thank you although that college wallet might be in for a bit of an awakening.
Works Cited
Pouliot, S.,
& Sumner, D. (2013). Traceability, recalls, industry reputation and product
safety. European Review of Agricultural Economics, Vol. 40(1),
121-142. Retrieved November 13, 2014, from Oxford University Press.
Starmer, E.
(2010, August 23). Math lessons for Budiansky: Industrial concentration vs.
local choice. Retrieved October 6, 2014, from
http://grist.org/article/food-fight-do-locavores-really-need-math-lessons/2/
Alex,
ReplyDeleteI think you do a good job bringing up the issue of contaminated food and how food from grocery stores could be making people sick. Your use of outside sources helps you establish your logos effectively. “Just a few years ago, in 2006, was the largest E. Coli outbreak ever and it resulted from a single grower.” (par. 2). This sentence, for example, gives your audience an idea of what food contamination outbreaks have happened in the past. You use this to convince your audience that there is a problem with America’s processed food. You then appeal to pathos by saying, “Being sick at school is the worst, causing you to miss assignments, class, and most of all, parties.” (par. 1). You connect with your audience this way and you show readers what they could possibly miss out on if they get sick because of the food that they buy in grocery stores. You also give your audience an alternative to buying their produce from grocery stores, which is buying from their local farmer’s market.
To improve your blog post, I would recommend using more effective images. The right images could persuade your audience even more to make the switch to local. Overall, you did a good job with your post.
Alex,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really great job explaining your topic and going into detail to connect what you were trying to get across to your readers. All of your facts and sources you use come in handy when trying to appeal to pathos and logos of your readers. You give them the right amount of information to affect them to understand what you are saying and think like you to make a change with this issue. Many of your comments throughout your blog will hit home with many college students, your jokes about having to wear a mask around and it not being stylish enough will make college students laugh. You gave your audience a solution at the end which greatly helps your blog. To improve your blog I think you could go more into depth about your solution to end this sickening food. Your blog was very interesting and catchy and I think you did a good job!
Alex,
ReplyDeleteExcellent work in presenting your argument. The writing and language that you used helped you to engage with the reader and thus, made for an entertaining piece. You also did a good job of balancing the humor with the serious aspects of the paper. All these attributes combined to make a blog that was both informative and fun to read.